Obligatory constructive criticism post. Got anything to say about my portrayal of Willard H Wright from Umineko no naku koro ni?

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OOC Information;
Name; Nami
Personal Journal; prayers
Contact; harmonicskies
Other Characters;
Shu Ouma | Guilty Crown | departing
Shirou Emiya | Fate/Stay Night | projections

IC Information;
Character Name; Willard H Wright
Canon; Umineko no Naku koro ni
Canon Point; Post Episode 7: Requiem of the Golden Witch.
Age; Early thirties. Who knows. Will is a mysterious old guy with no official canon age.

House; Odin.
Power; Fire Magic.

( In the final magic where love is visible... )